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Wednesday, June 9, 2021
Write that esay
Today on write that essay we were persuading. My topic was "why we should be able to dye our hair whatever colour we like". And I agree
Good job Katie Rose! It's Felicity and I really think you did very good because you got 88%. Next time you could try more sentence styles and stronger words. overall you did very good.
Hi Katie-Rose, I really like your lawyer paragraph writing. I like how your writing shows that dying your hair is a passion of yours. I would have done a bit more research and add facts to back up my writing. Other than that i liked reading it.
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Good job Katie Rose! It's Felicity and I really think you did very good because you got 88%. Next time you could try more sentence styles and stronger words. overall you did very good.
ReplyDeleteHi Katie-Rose, I really like your lawyer paragraph writing. I like how your writing shows that dying your hair is a passion of yours. I would have done a bit more research and add facts to back up my writing. Other than that i liked reading it.
ReplyDeleteHI Katie-Rose i like your lawyer paragraph.I strongly agree that we should be able to dye our hair at this school.Nice job:)From Shirley.
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